फूल और हवा का,
ये किस्सा पुराना है |
न है मोहब्बत फूल को,
पर हवा को, फूल पाना है ||
इस दुनिया में ऐसा,
और भी कई अफसाना है |
अपनी ताकत की तैश में लोगो को,
एक तरफ़ा मोहब्बत को पाना है ||
पहले तो उन्हें अपना,
प्यार दिखाना है |
मना करने पर,
उन्हें और डराना है ||
कहने को तो मोहब्बत सा पाक,
कहते है खुद को |
पर न हासिल होने पर,
तेजाब से चेहरा जलाना है ||
एक दिन इसी तैश में,
हवा ने फूल को पाना चाहा |
न करने पर फूल को,
उसने डरना चाहा ||
खुद क गुरुर में,
हवा ने फूल से कहा,
मैं झोंका हूँ हवा का,
तुझे मैं जबरदस्ती उड़ा ले जायूँगा |
टूट कर अपनी डाल से
फूल ने जवाब दिया,
मर जाउंगी, पर तेरी न हो पाऊँगी
ख़ाक हो कर भी, खुशबू फैला जाउंगी ||
माना की नाज़ुक हूँ,
पर तुझसे न डर जाउंगी |
तू जी लेना किस्से बहादुरी के ले कर,
मैं तो लड़की हूँ, मैं ही मर जाउंगी ||
Wow! Just love it.
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Thank u so much 😇
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Bahut khub….
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Dhanywad 😇
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Speechless…
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Thanks 🙏🏻
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Wow!!
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Thank u so much 😇
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Beautiful lines
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Thank u Abhay 😇
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बहुत खूब कहा
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Dhabywad gaurav 🙏🏻
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Womderful comparison,rohit !! Lajawaab.
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Thank u so much Aruna ji 🙏🏻 i m really glad that u liked it 😍
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Welcome dear.
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Mar jaungi par teri na ho paungi,khak hokar bhi khusboo felaungi….bohot hi unda post,samajhne wale samjhenge zarur ,samaj ko jagruk krne k liye ye ek uttam kadam …specially against acidattacks n many evils of society…
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Wow 😍 such a beautiful comment from beautiful writer 🙏🏻😇
Bahut khushi hui ki aapko pasand aaya and u correctly got the intension of this poem 😇😇
Just give a try to other post , hope u will like them also …… i would like to suggest you similar kind of post titled beti (in hindi) 😇
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Yeah bcoz though we choose different language to write our heart out,we think more or less and imagine through the same perspective….wish u all the best ..keep connecting…
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Yup totally agree . Language is only the way of communication but yup understanding the feeling of hears is always pleasurable 😇😇 thank u and all the best to u ….yup sure …keep smiling and keep shining dear 😇
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So very true
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क्या बात है सर…बहुत खूब लिखा है आपने।
सत्य की तथ्यपरक ढंग से व्याख्या।।
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Thank u so much dear 😇 glad u liked it 🙏🏻
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Most welcome sir thank u 🙏
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😊😊😇
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😊
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बहुत ही सुंदर अभिव्यक्ति है। शब्दों के इस्तेमाल का जवाब नहीं। बहुत ही अच्छा लिखा है रोहित जी।
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Ji dhanywad Rajni ji 🙏🏻 khushi hui ki aapko pasand aaya 😇
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Wah…outstanding…
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Thank u so much 😇
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इन हवाओँ को ज़रिया बनाकर झकझोर दिया है आपने…
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Dhanywad bhai 🙏🏻 ur words really matters for me
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बहुत खूब 👍👍
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Thank u ajay bhai
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Kya baat kya baat ,the reality life of girl portraited truely.
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Thank u so much 🙏🏻
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dil jeet liya!!
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Thank u 🙂
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बहुत हि सुन्दर.
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Dhanywad bhai _/\_
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Wonderful!
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Thank u so much
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I just got drowned in the sanctity of this post. It is portrayed well sweetly and flexibly, but it’s message came out very powerfully. It is amazing. Wo kehte hy naa ki badlav lane ke liye chillane ki zarurat ni hoti… 👏👏👏👏
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Wow 😍 one of the best comment anyone can get 👍🏻👍🏻 thank u so much madame 😉 and yup beautiful line “badlav k liye chillane ki zarurat nhi hoti ” 👏🏻👏🏻
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😊😊 I love your blog. Every post is mind blowing. I just wish that I could get better with my hindi in this life. I am the new admirer of your blog.
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Hahaha….first of all thank u so much 🙏🏻
And secondly you are already doing a great job😇 U knw how to play with words and specially ur ideas ……still i have many post to read (on your blog) will read one by one in my free time.
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Awww… Thankyou so much. You are most welcomed to my blog. Hope it amazes you. And happy blogging😊
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I m sure it will and u too happy blogging and keep smiling 😊
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😊
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Can I reblog this? I would like more people to read it. And above all I absolutely loved this…
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Yeah sure dear . You can
Thanks 😇🙏🏻
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This was Mesmerizing. I have been reading all of your posts. But this one was best so far.
You know we often use a term one sided love. Even if it’s one sided, love always know how to sacrifice. If it’s threatening you it’s never love. It’s just a violent passion. You have portrayed it with utmost grace. Loved it absolutely. 😊👏👏
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Wow 😍😍😍 such a beautiful comment from beautiful writer to made my day 😇😇
Thank u so much for your words and detailed feedback 🙏🏻
Yup totally agree , love always know how to sacrifice 👏🏻👏🏻
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My pleasure Rohit! I love your way of writing. Would love to read more from you. 😊
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Thanks again 😇😇
https://rohitnagblog.wordpress.com/2017/01/04/बेटी/
Just try similar post, hope u will like this also
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The story you told through these heart wrenching lines made me cry,and you pointed out to a major issue,its consequences on the female figure and the last line bears the bitter truth of society.
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Wow 😍😍 ur comments really made my day and even tmrw also 🙏🏻🙏🏻
Yup it is a major issue of our society, ppl should understand love is something u have to gain and u should sacrifice in love for others happiness , not all this nonsense.
Thanks again for your beautiful comment its always nice to get beautiful comment from beautiful writer😍
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👌 बहुत खूब
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Thank u 😇
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भावों की अभिव्यक्ति, यथार्थ का चित्रण,अद्भुत बहुत सराहनीय👌👌👍
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Thank u so much dear 😇
Glad u liked it 😉
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Welcome 😊 ..it’s my pleasure 😊
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☺️☺️☺️
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Well Mr.Writer I am speechless…u everytime amaze me with ur writing …I just just loved this one…
Well done ..
And keep it up☺
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thank u so much Shikha 🙂 keep smiling dear .
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Read quiet a few of your Posts. Excellent Poems you have penned. A dew are awesome. Shall try to Comment on them individually. I have a very limited vocabulary in Hindi hence such Poems are a lesson also for me and helps me to improve. Keep writing, keep sharing.
While reading this Poem reminded me of an old poem, more of rhyming effort by me, when a close friend’s family was harassed by the wife and inlaws of their son. Sec 498a was freshly enacted then. They were almost blackmailed into doing so many unwarranted things under coersion of Section 498a of IPC. The worst part was that it was a Love Marriage. It was then that I penned it : (After reading my poem you will understand why your poem reminded me of this one.)
गुलाब और हवा
साथ रहते रहते
नजदीक आने लगे
समाज से बगावत कर
सूरज की साक्षी में
एक दूजे के हो गये
हवा अगर न चलती
गुलाब पर छा जाती सुस्ती
जब जब मंद बयार बहती
दोनों पर ही चढ़ जाती मस्ती
गुलाब ने एक दिन कहा
काश में भी बह पाता
तुझे बाहों में भर
दूर कहीं ले जाता
तेरे अंतर्मन को खुशकर
अपना पुरुषार्थ दिखाता
ये २१वीं सदी है मेरे प्रियवर
पुरुष नारी में भेद नहीं
तू नहीं , मैं सही
ले चलूँ तुझे और कहीं ?
देख,पुरुष हूँ ,
अहम् नहीं छोड़ा जाता
हमें ऐसा ही गढ़ा है विधाता
मेरे संग तू चले
सही मुझको लगता,
तेरे संग मैं चलूँ
खुद को छोटा लगता !
बिफर गयी हवा
पुरुष अहम् की बातें सुन
चाहूँ तो उड़ा दूँ तुझको
मैं चाहूँ जिस और
डाल रखी है मैंने तेरे गले में
धारा 298a की डोर
सही गलत नहीं देखेगा कोई
सबको मैं ही सच्ची लगूँगी
आगे से वैसे ही करना
जैसा मैं कहूँगी |
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First of all i would like to thank you for your detail comment and encouraging,kind & motivational words.
Thanks for reading few of my posts and surly your comment on individual post will help me to improve and being better with days. your comments are highly welcomed and appreciated.
I can feel pain of that accident in your word. ever words of your poems are full of pain and emotions. I liked your way of writing but cant say it beautiful because story/emotion behind this is not beautiful 😥 . But i must say you have penned it so nicely …..Great work sir..
Thanks again
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